"Revisions"

As I look at my old papers I notice that all my papers have improved significantly. I had to make many revisions in the comma area and my paragraph organization. In two of my papers I also had problems with sentence structure. I used the St.Martha's Handbook while making many of my revisions. While revising my papers I compared the first draft to the last one. It helped me to compare my mistakes for the final draft. I carefully reviewed each sentence to see if any corrections needed to be made. While revising the research project I took many sentences out so the paragraphs could have more clarity. My narrative draft was the easiest to revise. I had the most trouble with the research project.

Writing Style Changes

English 101 has helped me alot with my writing techniques. The most important thing I have learned is that every good paper has a thesis sentence. In high school, my English teacher never explained the importance of a thesis sentence. She also told us to make we had a organized our paper properly. Another lesson I have learned is the proper way to use commas. I have always have trouble on my comma usage. I believe that in high school my teachers didn't really care if we were using comma the right way, so they never really showed us how to. While writing papers may be hard it is especially hard when you are use to using slang and short terms while email and texting. While writing some of my papers I have found my self trying to shorten some of my words. As a method of keeping me from using shorten terms while writing my papers I try to spell my words out while texting. My overall experience in the class was wonderful. My writing has greatly improved since the beginning of the semester.

Essay Errors

In my first drafts, I had a lot of problems with commas, sentence structure, and paragraph organization. For my comma problem, I referred to St. Martha's Handbook page 710. I practiced on the exercises in the chapter before revising my papers to make sure I fully understand the chapter. Chapter One on The Art and Craft of Writing, helped me with my paragraph organization. The chapter explained how to develop a paragraph and organize your sentences properly. Organizing my sentences became a big problem for me also. St.Martha's Handbook, page 101, helped me with that problem. I found it very hard to get all my ideas into one paragraph, so I started to mix my ideas. When writing my final drafts, I referred to the St.Martha's Handbook while I rewrote some of my paragraphs and sentences.

These are a few of the source I used for my research argument:

The first source has a lot of information on who is obligated to pay for college support. The information will be used in one of my paragraphs that focuses mainly on that topic.
Ward, Wayne V. “Who Pays for College?” http://www.wwlawman.com/ 30 May 2006 Law Office of V. Wayne Ward http://www.wwlawman.com/CM/FSDP/PracticeCenter/Family-Law/Child-Support.asp?f...

The second source has information on the factors that college support is issued. This information will combined in a paragraph with some information from Cathy Meyer.
Johnson, Laura “Child Support &College Support” http://www.smartdivorce.com/ 15 January 2005 http://smartdivorce.com/articles/college.shtml

The third source comes from a college website entitled The Batt. At first I didn't believe the website would provide good reliable information, but after research I learned that professors from the school go back and reread the information that the students have posted. I really didn't use a lot of information from the web page, but overall the information was helpful.
Foley, Sarah “College Costs Should Be Discussed During Divorce” http://www.thebatt.com/
29 September 2003 The Battalion
http://www.thebatt.com/home/index.cfm?event=displayArticlePrinterFriendly&uStory_id…

The fourth source comes from Attorney Marta J.Papa. She discusses what requirements are needed so parents can't exempt themselves from their financial responsibility. She also tells us that kids need to be on top of their game academically to keep parents from withdrawing having to pay for college funds.
Papa, Marta J. “Back to College” Child Support Concerns http://www.divorecnet.com/ 17 July 2004 DivorceNet
http://www.divorecnet.com/states/missouri/moart_24

Mr. Standler provides a twenty-one page document on the legal duties of a USA parent. He provides laws on why college is a necessity and he also gives his opinion on the topic.
Standler B. Ronald “Legal Duty of Parent in USA to Pay for Child’s College Education” 11 August 2003
http://cc.msnsche.com/cache.aspx?q=72339068494458&mkt=en-US&lang=en-US&w...

The last source provides a detailed list of the law on college support in each state.It will used when I compare the state of South Carolina to other states.
Meyer, Cathy “Should Child Support Cover College Expenses?” http://www.about.com/ 02 March 2006
http://divorcesupport.about.com/od/childsupportresources/a/childsupportcol.htm

This is an online article written by Cathy Meyer.

The article is a good source because the author goes into great detail about the reasons of why child support should be paid until children get out of college and she tells us the child support law in each state. Ms. Cathy Meyer has a lot of experience with working with divorced families. She is a single mother, relationship coach, marriage educator, divorce mediator, legal investigator, and freelance writer.

This is also an online article about child support laws.

The website is not a good source because the information in the article is not updated. The information in this website was used from the time period of 1970s and 1980s. The information in my paper will use facts and laws from the present day.

For my visual argument, I plan to use a newsletter to layout my argument on college and childsupport. I felt that a newsletter would be the best format for my visual argument. My newsletter will be seperated into two subheading, each explaining two different reasons for my argument. It will be a mininum view of how my research paper will be laid out. The newletter will contain photos of colleges with captions written underneath.

For the multi - tasked viual argument assignment, I plan to tackle the assignment mostly on Mondays, Wednesdays, and the weekends. On Tuesdays and Thursdays, I have very long classes so it will hard for me to work on the project like I want to . By Ocotber 30, I plan to have the visual argument completed. I will mostly work on the visual argument during the weekend of Ocotber 26- October 28. On the following Monday, I plan to revise the visual argument and make any required changes. Starting November 2, I will concentrate mainly on the research argument. I plan to spend a lot of time in the library preparing my research for the paper. After gathering all the required research, I will start writing the actual paper. From November 15 - the 19th, I will use those days to revise and edit my paper. I would like to give mself more than one day to revise the paper. On November 20, I will turn in my paper to professor Karl Fornes.